Tuesday, January 29, 2013

Avoiding writing a French paper...

So instead, I thought I'd share a short story I recently wrote for my Advanced Fiction course! I hope to take it somewhere if the characters have more to say, but only time will tell. The assignment description was to mimik the opening of Amy Bloom's novel Away, so that's where it began, but I tried not to limit myself to only write her story with different words. It transformed into my version.

January 29th 2013.
It’s always like this: the best get-togethers are had at a place that serves hot soup.

There are one hundred and fifty bagel choices sitting in organized baskets coated with sweet cinnamon sugar, chewy sesame seeds, rosemary garlic, and crunchy poppy seed bits. Amateur artwork lines the walls and the dinner rush keeps the eyes of the employees frantic and the potential bagel-buyers antsy.
A bearded homeless man takes a nap on the floor. Three young Indian students, tense and focused, discuss current events at a round table meant for seven. A purse is forgotten on a carpeted floor. Fliers for University events are distributed amongst unwilling participants by a group of ambitious pantsuit wearers. Two best friends discuss the headlines in their small lives. A dark, calm man approaches people about spare change and the possibility of Heaven or Hell. The warm light from the setting sun interrupts the concentration of a student’s attempts to absorb James Joyce.
The coffee makers dribbled with lukewarm liquid. It was late in the day and only an ivory-skinned woman with sad eyes had asked for her caffeine freshly brewed, but that was 15 minutes ago and the trainees had completely forgotten about her. The neglected novel the woman held in her slender, translucent hand sat poised, mid-air as her sad eyes gazed passed the passing families and laughing reunions and fixated on the pavement. The cool, cement pavement that held no expectations for her.  A husband and wife silently taste their paninis; a four year old plays imaginary tag with every piece of furniture clustered around the crowded eatery. That was unwise, Emily noted, where was her mother?
She shouldn’t have come this late in the evening, clearly this time of day was not the time to come to Panera if you are looking for solitude, and she was. Yet there’s something endearing about a gaggle of older woman digging into their steaming bread bowls full of sticky chicken and dumpling soup while clucking over their children and how many face-lifts that witch from three doors down has had this year.  Emily sat three tables over from such a cluster of women, entranced by their reflections and the dribbles of coffee splattered down the pudgy woman’s blouse.  She had a throaty laugh and a couple of chins that were tucked beneath years of what Emily imagined being quite a life.  Her gold watch choked her thick wrist and her white, button-up blouse squeezed the rest of her extra inches of her body as she reached for a pinch more sugar to put in her coffee.  Across from her sat another woman who looked as though she were the grandma that made Christmas dinner every year, but never took a bite of it.  Her oatmeal colored sweater sagged over her pointy joints. It was quite the contrast, Emily observed.  She often wondered how she would look as an older woman.  Regal? Probably not, but it sounded good.  She’d be the mousey one always clutching to a mug of green tea and past memories. Jamie would probably resemble the old crotchety man growling at the people surrounding and peering out of his thick glasses. What a sight. She held an imaginary conversation with him about it. When she brings him tulips tomorrow, she’ll ask him what kind of old man he would have been. She likes to ask him questions and recount the monotonous details of her day her mother can’t be burdened with, even if he can’t respond.

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